This poem "As"
Interested in comments. As As death eludes the posse of our thought Which stalls in awe to shiver at the brink, The gaunt mythology wh...Read More
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This is well crafted, and through the first 9 lines, the meter is tight. Lines 9, 13 and 14 slip away from you in terms of meter.The endstopped lines generally work well, and you effectively handle...
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Hi Chris. I've been thinking about this one. An irritant for me is that, in this sonnet you are assuming a heck of a lot for "we". None of this applies to me, y'see. I'm not than...Read More
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Your comments were just what I needed to refine an area of this poem, I now see needed help. I enjoy this sonnet better now, and I appreciate your input.Thanks. ChrisPS what I changes was: line 3 and...
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I guess what I'm saying is that if people are numb to death, they are unavoidably numb to life. If their spiritual preparation for one is lacking, then their actual life experiences are obliged to be...
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Hi again Chris. Thanks for your name - it's heaps nicer addressing you now! (I came back to this in between my initial post and your reply to Tom, and then edited out my rave about names before your...
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